"The Loser’s Club works primarily because it pairs great fundamentals in the presentation and structure of the narrative with wildly creative characters. In a script that has a fair share of surprises, the most interesting thing was the cast. Regardless of how large the role is, every character has such a memorable personality or description that it makes the whole narrative appear highly original even though it adheres fairly rigidly to conventional three act structure. However, this adherence is to the narrative’s benefit as the highs and lows of the story land at the appropriate times. The journey of change may seem familiar when laid out clinically, beat by beat, but the characters have enough personality and often more than enough complexity to their motivations to give The Loser’s Club real distinction.
The Loser’s Club succeeds because of fantastic characters and solid structure. These two qualities make for the bedrock of any good script, but this narrative has a lot of other positives on top of this. Ever escalating tension, some great moment-to- moment writing in the action description, creative dialogue – these all add up to give the impression of a very professional script. I enjoyed my time with this story because it swings for the fences with interesting plot points, but gives us a reason to care about the action with nuanced characters. A good read from beginning to end."
"For the most part the script's premise can be discerned and summarized quickly. The writer demonstrates a clear and strong voice here, employing a solid comedic writing voice and fully immersing the reader into this world. The writer also employs nuanced dialogue that makes for an entertaining script. It provides a consistent and appealing edgy tone."
"The Loser’s Club is a coming-of-age drama that follows a group of high school students who kidnap their bullies when their school does nothing to punish the bullies. This premise offers a rich foundation for conflict to unfold. Events revolve around a group of misfits who kidnap their high school bullies to force them to change their ways. This premise is easy to ascertain within scenes and can be summarized in a concise logline. The bullies becoming victims of kidnapping is an interesting hook that makes the core concept instantly engaging. Also, a source of tension, based on the bullying the protagonist experiences, is built into the premise, and this provides ample opportunity for conflict to emerge in the plot. As the bullies are forced to learn about the unpopular kids, the characters and their relationships have the ability to change in meaningful ways over time."
"The early ratings from the judges are very high for your screenplay. You're off to a great start. This screenplay is very well written and defined. You did a great job of creating so many different personalities with all of these characters. This took some planning!"
Pitch Feedback: "I really like the story! It's very fresh and has not been seen like this. Great characters and a story that stands up for those who can't (in a comedic way)… All the best to the writer and Bravo!!"
This is a really interesting script that mostly centers around a single moment of confrontation between bullies and their victims. It’s quite a strong concept but feels rooted in reality – a group of friends pushed too far and perhaps to their limit. The failure on the part of the school is tangible in their reactions to Trenton’s retaliation, but it’s much less explored and we instead get a single extended scene that provides some of the most in-depth exploration of childhood bullying ever put to screen (well, script), exploring both bullies and their own take on the events just as well as those of the ‘losers’… this was a genuinely interesting read and something that I can’t recall ever being explored in such depth before.